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Crepuscular Hunter

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Image Credit: Anjo Beckers Photography

Crepuscular Hunter

Ensnaring victims in honeydew words, he’s been spotted again with another woman. Softly sweeping her locks from her face, he smiled as he lowered his mouth to hers. Tongue parting her lips, his fingers caressed the nape of her neck as they searched each others mouths longingly.

Fatal mistake made: pawing her outside our place.

I watched them, his hand snaking down her back until it pulled her closer to him, resting in the small of her back.

Touché

Sentiment whittled down. I don’t need him. He pleads with me, crying, but I’m already gone.

Bye, cheater.

Life Goes On.

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Written for: Week 14 – 100 Word Wednesday

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15 thoughts on “Crepuscular Hunter

    1. He looks so pleadingly at the woman he sits across from – and she? So dismissive. She looks like she’s over it. Over him. Reading the body language of those two merits a dozen stories. I considered writing it from the viewpoint of the man in the foreground — “he’s seen this scene before” and “it’s not nearly as uncommon as you’d like, a man pleading for a woman”s unrequited love”- but the story I wrote is a very abbreviated version of a novelette I wrote on the image when I first saw it months ago and requested to be able to use is as a writing prompt from the photographer, Anjo Beckers: https://anjobeckers.com. Thank you kindly for stopping by 🙂

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  1. Ha! My worlds just collided. Your words… Anjo’s photography… I just saw her on Sunday. Too cool.
    A few thoughts about this actual post: I had to look up crepuscular (always good to learn a new word). The tone of this post started out detached and clinical (the title, “ensnaring victims”), like an omniscient narrator… and then shifted to quite personal (“I don’t need him”).

    Paris is big, but this guy actually looks familiar! But it’s probably just that there are loads of guys who look just like that here.

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    1. Yes — thank you for being our connection 😉 I so loved reading your tales from Paris, and when I began looking at her images I was just blown away. Literally every image she posts to Instagram tells a story – I am so moved!!

      With this image: she posted it ages ago, but I had written a novelette on the image. She kindly allowed me to use it for our weekly writing challenge, but it now seemed too personal {versus the Flash Fiction I usually write for these challenges}. As I began to edit and hone my words to match the tone I wanted to convey {as you said, detached at the onset, and as reflections on the scene became more personal, mimicking her own experience, the narrator can’t help but get caught in her own emotion. I’m so glad the tone came across. It was so difficult to pare down to only 100 words! I hope you are well and thank you kindly for stopping by 🙂

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  2. It really is hard sometimes to pare down the story to 100 words–I had lots more introduction in mine, but had to cut it–which is good practice, I don’t deny! 🙂 The smiling guy in the photo absolutely INVITES critical stories–he looks like a well-dressed scumbag!!

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    1. I think the man with the glasses pushed up just looks so exasperated…it’s difficult for me to pin point it, but his companion being {seemingly} so dismissive, head turned, was likely a nanosecond captured in the image — but it’s that nanosecond that makes the image such huge grounding for a million stories. If you’re looking for more fantastic prompts — check out Anjo Beckers website or Instagram feed ❤

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